2) Reflection on feedback:
The feedback I received was remarkably accurate. I agreed with almost everything I received.
-work on conversational yet passionate tone
- dress to impress (although I was wearing BLUE apparel for the last pitch)
-focus on cultural experience as opposed to work experience
3) I tried to sound less formal in this elevator pitch but I would still like to work on having a more conversational tone when giving an elevator pitch. I also received some feedback saying to dress up more for this elevator pitch so I decided to go with a collared shirt as opposed to the BLUE tank top. I removed my statement about raising awareness for this pitch but I think our primary method of raising awareness is definitely social media. BLUE Missions has a website and an instagram and facebook account that have all proven to be extremely effective for us. Again, I will continue to work on my delivery of the pitch as well as the content included in the pitch for my future presentations whether it be in this course or not. Finally, the most important change in this pitch is that I want to focus more on the cultural immersion experience that BLUE trips offer as opposed to just the water project itself. This is a key component of BLUE trips and something I cherish a lot to this day.
Jose, great job on the elevator pitch. You sounded very conversational and from the feedback, that is something that sounds like you improved on. I think that this is a solid idea and it would be great to help other countries with clean water, but here in the US we have our own problems that might need to be addressed first. But overall, great idea and good luck in the future. If you want to check out my blog you can find it below:
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Hey Jose!
ReplyDeleteGreat job with this elevator pitch. You were very calm and conversational, but also showed your confidence in your idea and your product. It looks like you really took the feedback from people on your other elevator pitches and improved on them to make this go around great! Your idea is very innovative, and with some more thought and attention to details and logistics, would help a lot of people. You can check out my blog post at http://amunozent.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hi Jose!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your video and blog, I really enjoyed reading and watching it! I think you did a wonderful job, your pitch was to the point yet detailed. I also really appreciated the description and reflection you wrote below; it gave me a better understanding of your entrepreneurial ideas and plan. Here is the link to my Elevator Pitch No. 3, you should check it out when you get the chance.http://ent3003nicole.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hi Jose,
ReplyDeleteI really like your idea. I am from Mexico so I completely understand. What if you reach out to other countries though, such as Mexico, Brazil and Venezuela? Its just a thought because a lot of countries need help. Try not to sway from one side to the other when your talking. Also, just a suggestion, try asking at the beginning "How easy is it to drink a glass of water?" or something like that. It was a bit confusing but I liked what you were trying to accomplish
Here is my blog: http://2016entrepreneurs.blogspot.com